I listened to this one on audio and my biggest complaint is that there is so much dialogue that parts are infested with "said"s. Like big sections of this:
"...", Billy said.it is somewhat jarring. overall, i enjoyed it. a 6.
"...", Wati said.
Dane said "...".
"...", Billy said.
"....", Dane said.
I know i've been bleh with my reviews recently; i am reading but not much feeling like writing. Hopefully i'll get outa the writing slump soon!